Feedback mainly said that the eyes could do with being more 'snappy' and that perhaps a blink before and after the 'bog-eyed' look would help the transition. So that is what I've worked on plus added a few more breakdowns here and there.
Sending this away again for feedback.
I applied what I learned from the blinks video I'd posted before, particularly using the eye deformers to 'squish' the eyes a bit when blinking. This makes the face look more connected as the eye deformers move the eyebrows and cheeks slightly too. I think it looks more natural and appealing, I hope it looks that way to an audience too!